First of all, from what I could read, no, you're not horrible with action scenes. Normally, I don't comment on the use of English (I do quote a thing here or there). I don't make the same type of comments I'd do if it was written in a language I'm used to write in, just because I can't give sound reasons as to why I like or don't like something. Apart from obvious stuff like the flow of it all, the wording and reading beautiful sentences. In this fic, the pacing is coherent because you use Yunho. And Yunho just shrugs and does what needs to be done. Of course, there're details that you leave out, but those you can mention or get back to in the future (like Yunho remembering the day he met them, or when he knew they where his friends) so it doesn't feel like the context is badly exposed.
So, don't feel aversion and give me some more of this xDDDD
!!! ♥♥♥♥ They are! (I'll comment Devil You Know later because that is another one of my favourites) What I find that normally happens is that there's some powers that go specially well with some characters. But, above all, I agree with superpowers being specially fun to assign and explore. Oh boy, do I agree with that!!! ♥♥♥♥
It doesn't. It could be much more, but that's what Extended Versions and Director's (Writer's) Cuts are for, isn't it? *_*
It's simply relieving to read a good Yunho. In my case, he is the most difficult one to write. I tend to go too much to his silly side which always degenerates into including Heechul and then everything turns chaotic. It may or may not have some relevance the fact that if I can include 25 characters I won't use only 5 LOL
Thank you so much for giving me such a wonderful start for my day!
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Date: 2012-01-10 07:40 am (UTC)So, don't feel aversion and give me some more of this xDDDD
!!! ♥♥♥♥ They are! (I'll comment Devil You Know later because that is another one of my favourites) What I find that normally happens is that there's some powers that go specially well with some characters. But, above all, I agree with superpowers being specially fun to assign and explore. Oh boy, do I agree with that!!! ♥♥♥♥
It doesn't. It could be much more, but that's what Extended Versions and Director's (Writer's) Cuts are for, isn't it? *_*
It's simply relieving to read a good Yunho. In my case, he is the most difficult one to write. I tend to go too much to his silly side
which always degenerates into including Heechul and then everything turns chaotic. It may or may not have some relevance the fact that if I can include 25 characters I won't use only 5 LOLThank you so much for giving me such a wonderful start for my day!